So today I'm posting the first part of the story and I will hopefully finish the second part soon and post it sometime this week.
For anyone who didn't read previous posts, this story is on the topic of the life of a slave girl in early 19th century Louisiana told from the perspective of a white observer who is neutral on the topic of slavery.
I did research the topic of slavery and this time period so everything should be pretty accurate historically. If you have any questions about that, please feel free to ask.
Anyway, here is part one:
It was a hot Louisiana morning
in the middle of August. I was awakened
as usual by the rooster’s crow and wished like anything I could go back to
sleep. A light breeze blew in through my open window as I rolled out of bed to
get dressed. I pulled a clean white shirt over my head and tucked it into a
pair of black trousers. Pulling on a pair of socks and shoes, I checked my appearance
in the mirror. Mother would have a fit if I came down with my hair sticking up
as it was. Using a comb I tamed it so it lay flat on my head.
As I left my bedroom I could smell the sweet scent of breakfast wafting
in from the kitchen outside. My stomach rumbled hungrily as I tumbled lazily
down the stairs and into the dining room. Mother was already sitting at the
long wooden table showing my five year old sister Louise how to sit properly
like a lady and use her fork and knife. My older sister Emilie sat watching
them and giving bits of advice when she felt it necessary.
“Good morning, Armand,” Mother said, looking up from her lessons with
Louise. She gave me the once over to insure that I was properly dressed and
groomed. Ever since I turned fifteen, Mother had treated me like a grown man
and insisted I dress and act as a gentleman.
“Good morning, ladies,” I said, with the
polite bow that Mother had taught me. She smiled and motioned me to my seat. Since
Father had passed away at the beginning of the year I had taken his seat at the
head of the table. It felt wrong to sit there, I was not the head of the house.
But Mother insisted.
“What will you be doing today, Armand?” Mother
asked, her large blue eyes prominent in her small round face.
“I thought I might go for a swim
in the lake after breakfast,” I said, imagining how good the cool water would
feel on my already hot and sweating skin.
“Mary and I are going to ride
into town today, Mother! There are rumors of a new shop with the finest fabrics
around and I need a new dress for the dance next month,” Emilie interjected.
Mother smiled.
“That sounds delightful but be
sure you are back before dinner. This afternoon I would like you finish your
needlepoint.”
“Yes ma’am,” Emilie said, rolling her brown
eyes. She was excellent at needlepoint but despised it. Emilie was full of
energy and life and sitting still for hours at a time was torture for her.
“Mama I am hungry,” Louise’s
soft childlike voice said. “When is the food coming?”
“Soon, my dear,” Mother assured
her.
And it was just then that Melinda, our cook came in followed by a young
black girl who I did not recognize.
“Good mornin’, missus,” Melinda
drawled, holding a steaming pot of porridge in her hands padded by several towels
and her apron.
“Melinda,” Mother acknowledged with
a slight inclination of her head.
“Who is this girl with you this
morning?”
“This be Hannah, missus. She
came here jus’ yesterday and this be her first day in the kitchen.”
Prompted by Melinda, Hannah sank into the best curtsey she could while
holding a skillet of cornbread being careful not to make eye contact with any
of us at the table. She looked unhealthily thin and her hands seemed to tremble
slightly as if she had never before been presented to people.
“You say she is new as of
yesterday?” Mother repeated.
Melinda nodded.
“Mister Joseph bought her
yesterday in the town. Paid a good price too,” Melinda told her. Mister Joseph
was our neighbor who had been helping Mother tend to the plantation since
Father passed on. He would often go into town to buy us slaves or ride across
the plantation to ensure the field hands were working hard and our crops of
cotton and tobacco were healthy and growing.
“Well I hope she was worth it,”
Mother said drily, giving Hannah the up and down look that she had given me.
Hannah nodded her head slightly as if to say that she was worth the price and
then followed Melinda around the table serving us each a piece of fresh
cornbread with our meal.
“Armand will you say the
blessing?” Mother asked. It felt strange for me to say the blessing; that had
always been Father’s job. I said it just the way I remembered him doing it and
Mother smiled at me as we finished by crossing ourselves.
“Mother, Mary says that she and
her family do not cross themselves after prayers or pray to the Blessed Virgin,”
Emilie commented as we began eating.
“She is an American, she does
not practice our faith,” Mother explained. “Do not let her strange practices
influence you. Our territory is owned by America but our souls are not.”
Emilie nodded and continued eating.
When breakfast was over, Emilie hurried from
the table, eager to meet up with Mary and go into town. Mother told her to be
careful and then looked to me.
“Armand I want you back from the
lake before noon. And stay on the path. There are unwelcome creatures in the
woods.”
As I got up from the table to leave, Sarah, one of our young house
slaves, came into the dining room to collect Louise. She was like a nanny to
her and kept her out from under Mother’s feet as she and Mister Joseph took
care of the house and plantation.
“Sarah I would like Louise to
play outside today but keep her in the shade of the trees so the sun does not
darken her skin.”
“Yes, missus,” Sarah said
respectfully, careful as Hannah had been not to meet my mother’s eyes. Louise
ran to Sarah happily, took her hand and began pulling her from the room. At
that moment, Hannah walked in still looking shy and began collecting dishes
from breakfast. Mother looked at her contemplatively for a moment and then
said,
“Sarah, take this girl with you
this morning,” as if she had already forgotten her name.
“She is new and I want her to
learn all aspects of working in the house.”
Sarah nodded her head and
motioned for Hannah to come join her. Hannah looked up helplessly, a pile of
dirty dishes already in her hands.
“Take those to the kitchen and
then send Melinda to collect the rest,” Mother said, sounding exasperated. With
that last order she swept out of the kitchen, her long powder blue dress
swishing back and forth on her hips.
Relieved to no longer be under the scrutinous eye of my mother, I
hurried upstairs to fetch my hat and then back downstairs and out the front
door toward the lake. It was only a half hour’s walk and with it being such a
nice day I decided not to take a horse. Grabbing a long stick I let it hang
from my hand as I walked leaving a small weaving trail in the dirt behind me.
I could
see Sarah and Hannah watching Louise play under one of the many big trees that dotted
the yard. Detouring from the path, I stooped to pick a buttercup and hurried
over to my little sister. She looked up when she heard me coming and was
delighted to see the beautiful yellow flower in my hand. I slid it delicately
into one of her two little braids and she smiled.
“Am I pretty now, brother?” she
asked, looking up at me expectantly.
“Beautiful,” I told her, with a
smile as big as her own. She turned back to her playing, pausing every few
moments to look at her flower.
I turned to walk back to the path and as I went I could hear a voice
singing. It was unfamiliar and so I knew it must be Hannah’s voice. The words
of the song were difficult to make out but she seemed to be singing of Moses
and the Promised Land. I had heard this song from other slaves singing in
mournful voices as if they too were suffering a fate as horrible as the
Israelites’. I wondered if they thought we, the white folk, were like the
horrible slave masters in Egypt who beat and tortured the Israelites.
I shook my head as if to convince myself that we were not. Our slaves were
treated well. They all had food, clothing and shelter. Satisfied with this
answer to my own question, I continued along the path eager to relax in its
cool water.
As mother instructed, I was home by noon and we had dinner together.
Emilie babbled on and on about her trip into town and all the beautiful fabrics
she had found. She had picked a dark green fabric for her new dress and Mary
picked a pale yellow. Mother talked about her tasks of the morning and as she
spoke, I heard Louise muttering the words of the song Hannah had been singing
hours before.
Mother heard her too just then for she stopped mid-sentence and put her
fork down on the table. We all stared at Louise who was oblivious to us as she
twirled her fork through her potatoes singing about Moses leading his people
from Egypt.
“Where did you learn this new song, Louise?”
Mother asked, trying to sound gentle but there was still a hint of anger in her
voice.
“Hannah was singing it this
morning, Mother,” Louise answered innocently. “She said her mammy taught it to
her when she was a girl.”
Mother sat up and looked straight ahead, her lips pursed together. I
could tell she was struggling to control herself. Turning to one of the slaves
who stood in the corner to attend to us, she ordered,
“Go and fetch this new girl
Hannah.”
The slave disappeared immediately and returned moments later with Hannah
in tow. The slave must have told her that Mother was upset for Hannah came in
shaking even more than she had that morning and stared silently at the floor.
“Were you singing negro songs to
my little girl this morning?” Mother asked succinctly.
Hannah nodded, still refusing to look up.
“I do not want my child’s head
full of your nonsense songs, understand? You will go the rest of the day
without eating and if I ever hear you sing around my little girl again your punishment
will be much more severe.”
“Yes, missus,” Hannah mumbled, sinking into a
deep curtsey. She scurried from the room and Mother looked down at Louise who
seemed completely unaware of what had just occurred.
“You must never sing that song
again, darling. It is quite bad and you must put it out of your mind. Can you
do that for me?” Mother asked, in a sickeningly sweet voice. Louise looked up
at her and nodded. Mother continued
eating muttering something about having words with Sarah later on.
I stabbed at the peas on my plate and thought about what had just
happened. Were the slaves in fact abused and downtrodden as the Israelites had
been? Hannah had just been told not to
eat for the rest of the day which was surely a form of torture. Mother had
always said the slaves were less than human and more like animals so perhaps
they needed to be trained by harsh punishments and beating as one would beat a
horse or a mule into submission. Sighing, I tried to put these confusing
thoughts out of my mind and focus on eating my peas.
I really like it. However, when you write about a certain place and time it is good to do some research. I don't think tobacco was a big crop in Louisiana. Mostly cotton and sugar cane. I would check into whether porridge was eaten for breakfast, the cornbread is okay I think. Also, the trees in the yard could be moss covered oak. If they are large and there are several of them, they would command the yard, not dot it. Honeysuckle is abundant in La. you could add that in the story. I would also change the lake to a pond. I thought the interaction between the characters was really good. I like the way you set up the moral dilemma that is to be the focal point of the story. Personally, I do not like the idea that the mother thinks slaves less than human, I challenge the present idea that that is how slaves where viewed. Mostly I think they were viewed as human, but of an inferior race. They were still provided with Spiritual guidance by the owner. One would not provide spiritual guidance to an animal.
ReplyDeleteI like the way your sentences flow, and the descriptive sentences. I would not say "owed by America". I would say " a part of the United States".
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